Script

 

 Feedback response

Narrative -  My narrative is clear to see and the story is coming through well. To improve my narrative I need to complete the script and ensure that the narrative continues with the same quality. 

Characters - All of my characters are believable and they all have a clear purpose and it is clear who my main character is. To improve my characters I need to use more action lines to describe them and to continue/improve their development. 

Dialogue - All of my dialogue is believable and it progresses the story well. To improve my dialogue I need to add more action lines to get a better understanding of what is happening. 

Format - Most of my formatting is correct I just need to change the scene headings and format the dialogue correctly. 

Quality of writing - My quality of writing is fine, just need to continue with it in the rest of my script.

Audience appeal - Its clear what my genre is but my target audience isn't yet established as I need to explain who my characters are and finish my story.